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i never liked life until. by =Corina90:iconCorina90:


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Author's Comments

{"and I'll do anything you ever
dreamed to be complete
little pieces of the nothing that fall
may put your arms around me
what you feel is what you are
and what you are is beautiful "
--goo goo dolls

full title: i never liked life until i lived it with you

whatever you say, don't say it's cliched.
i might be feeling a little cliched at the moment.
and some cliches are there for a reason.
:heart:

Critiques


:icongravedancer23:
I'm completely agreeing with the two critiques before mine - I love it! I love that you've kept it simple. The emotions that are drawn from it are so much stronger since the images you present are kept clear and simple. They're very effective and I would say this is something you can be proud of. The only little thing I would mention is the absence of capital letters - I don't know if that was maybe intentional? It certainly doesn't take anything away from the piece so it really is a very minor point. From reading the comments, it has made a lot of people smile and that is more than enough to make it great.
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This piece just made my heart want more. The simplicity along with passion is truly what makes this piece. It is sweet and it is marvelous. Other than the fact that mathematical equations have been used before to describe love (What else can I say though?, inspiration always comes from somewhere.), it is still breathtakingly beautiful.

"Being swept off of my feet" is a common phrase, but it is woven into a clever sentence. "Being kissed boneless" is a marvelous phrase that I had never heard before and it left me stunned in the end.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this very much.
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It's definitely a beautiful piece, great job, wonderful lyrics in the authors comments.

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"He felt that his whole life was some kind of dream and he sometimes wondered whose it was and whether they were enjoying it." -- Douglas Adams, Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy
:iconlil-christa:
"and when i sat on your lap, counted the kisses, multiplied the desire, divided the distance and subtracted the inhibitions, i decided i might be mathematically inclined after all. "

^^^ so freaking beautiful!
you never let me down :D

your poetry is amazing.
And this one is definately not an exception :)

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I'm a fifteen year old that's short enough to pass for an eight year old, draws like a three year old and gives advice to people twice my age.....welcome to irony, hoes.
;p
:iconlittlewhite-shadows:
beautiful.
you never let me down.
:heart:
:iconallinix:
*huggles it, and you* i dunno. it made me happy. :heart:

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"without imagination, there can be no dreams. without dreams, there can be no reality. therefore, the world is nothing without imagination."
:iconloopy-lexy:
This is amazing and intense. Wow.

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you are my sweetest downfall
i loved you first
:iconalmostlovers:
I think it's absolutely beautiful as usual. :heart:

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I think you're a boy with eyes like wishing wells that never come true.
When it's almost a heartbeat away from silence she curls up in closets and the lack of oxygen makes her feel like she can fly.
:iconcorina90:
you are soso nice to me :cuddle:
:iconcorina90:
thank you soso much!
:iconcorina90:
:heart: thank you! and i am so glad.

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