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{"give me something to believe in, a breath from the breathing
so write it down, I don't think that I'll close my eyes 'cause lately I'm not dreaming so what's the point in sleeping?" --jack's mannequin Comments
 wow...i've been favin a lot of your stuff lately...again: simply love it *hits "send", then the fave button*
-- "without imagination, there can be no dreams. without dreams, there can be no reality. therefore, the world is nothing without imagination." You will find no complaints from me, love
 Thank you for all of your support. of course ^_^ heh. i have a whole collection in my faves of your writing.
and i have to say, your work often matches how i'm feeling at the time. not always, but a lot. it's kind of spooky. -- "without imagination, there can be no dreams. without dreams, there can be no reality. therefore, the world is nothing without imagination."  this is beautiful
 Beautiful!
 -- I'm a Ninja! Beautiful!
-- I'm a Ninja!  very very veryt very very very very very very very very nice, may dear friend may my god bless you
 Love love love love this!
 You are just fabulous, my dear. -- I am a poet, but sometimes words fail me. Aw, I am so glad you enjoyed it!
Thank you. That is a little spooky but I do enjoy knowing I'm not alone in feeling this way.
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Critiques
Hello darlin!
I was so excited to be able to tell you a bit more in depth why I love this piece. Thank you for opening up your work to critiques.
01.
This stanza is such a fabulous opener. The first sentence grabs you and pulls you into the poem. I really liked the part in the second sentence where you used, "I just can't find the grace to make them as beautiful..." to pull in the idea of praying again.
I also loved the contrast of the angel/devil that you used, it's a fresh new idea, and I really appreciated it.
02.
I have to admit that the first part of this was a bit confusing at first, but I loved the imagery... its really well done. And the last "To be frank, darling..." is really ironic and has a great edge of sarcasm to it.
03.
This is just a really strong middle to the poem, it makes a good transition between 02. and 04. Again, really great imagery.
04.
This is without a doubt my favorite stanza. The imagery is fantastic... I'm in awe of it, really. I liked how you switched the heart and bones... usually poets will use the ice with heart, and lead with bones, I loved how you switched those. If that makes any sense at all XD
"even if my soul dropped to my feet and crawled out my toes..."
I absolutely
05.
A really solid, good ending to the poem. I loved how you brought in the imagery from the earlier stanzas and continued your thoughts through the end.
Overall, this was a very solid write, and I really loved the imagery that you brought through the piece.
Love love love this piece.
Thank you for opening it up to critiques.
Eeferz
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